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Alexandria Burgess - Approved [S]
« on: 18 Jul 2011, 06:08 pm »
First and Last Name:
Alexandria Burgess


Bloodline:
Muggleborn
Hair Color:
Black
Eye Color:
Blue
General Build:
Average
Height:
Average

Birthplace:
Summertown, Oxfordshire, U.K.
Brief Childhood History:
Alexandria or ‘Alex’ is the only daughter of Drs. Ashley and Alice Burgess. She’d had a very typical life up until her eleventh year. She’s always been very close to both her mum and dad. Alice is a well respected surgeon, or the muggle version of a healer, while Ashley, her father is a professor at Oxford University.
As the daughter of a man who wanted a son, Alex was encouraged to play sports from a young age. Ashley’s favorite is rugby, so that’s what he pushed on her. She’s since grown to love the sport, as well as football or as the Americans say, soccer. It is through sports that she’s made most of her friends. If she gets the chance, she still plays for parts of her summer holidays.
During the summer of her eleventh year, nearly everything changed.  Alice, ever aware of her surroundings when driving and careful to keep an eye on any of the neighborhood kids didn’t notice the very oddly dressed woman standing at the end of the walk. Instead, it was Alexandria who saw her as her mother pulled into the driveway.
“Mommy, who’s that?” Alex said as she pointed at their odd looking visitor.
Alice was silent, not willing to express her fear of the strange looking woman to her young daughter. Instead, she parked her car and cautiously approached the newcomer, hand in her purse, tightly clutching the pepper spray concealed within.
The stranger’s cordial introduction and friendly demeanor, helped to quell her fears, although she didn’t completely let her guard down. After learning of the purpose of this unexpected visit, Alice retrieved Alex from the car and invited the woman who introduced herself as a ministry official into their large Victorian style home.

Strengths (Including Personality and Academic):
Alex has always been a very resourceful and intelligent girl. Her knowledge of muggle science  may combine with what she'll learn about the magical properties of ingredients to leave her near the top of her potions classes. She’s also rather athletic. Years of rugby have left her slightly muscular, yet still obviously feminine. Her build and athletic skill set could transfer well into quidditch.
Weaknesses (Including Personality and Academic):
She can be rather selfish, perhaps it’s her ambition or more simply put, her determination to succeed. As a muggleborn, she’s slightly behind many of her peers. Throughout her days in muggle primary school, Alex always had little patience for history, her inroduction to the wizarding world won't have changed that.
What House You Feel Your Character Belongs In and Why:
Growing up, the need to prove herself, to her father and to herself, has always been there. Her experience in sports have given her a well organized, strategic, goal oriented mind. This, coupled with her willingness to do what is necessary to win or otherwise achieve her aims allow her to succeed where someone less agressive might fail. Her ambition and cunning would make for an excellent Slytherin.
« Last Edit: 19 Jul 2011, 04:14 am by Sue »
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Offline Tany

Re: Alexandria Burgess
« Reply #1 on: 18 Jul 2011, 07:44 pm »
Heya Alexandria and welcome to HPRPG~!

However, before we can sort you, there are a few things we need to address. Firstly, we're just looking for one of the three adjectives we offer on the unfilled sheet to describe the 'general build' and 'height' sections, so please chose from those choices. Secondly, can you remove the entire mention of McGonagall and whatnot in her history. ^^ If anyone came to Alexandria's house to further explain Hogwarts it would've been a vague Ministry worker and not the headmistress. <3 Otherwise your history looks good!

And lastly, in her strengths, you've worded it to imply that she's already excelling in potions. Could you reword it to say that she'll do well in potions in the future, as she technically isn't sorted. Also, the mention of being popular with boys. ^^; In the future that'll be fine, but Alexandria is only eleven currently. :lol: As mentioned with the strengths, the mention of her already being a Slytherin in her weaknesses needs to be removed/reworded as well as mention of wandwork and all that jazz. While filling out the sheet, keep in mind that this is all before she's been at Hogwarts, if that helps. <3

Also, nothing big, but we're sorting your character, not you. ^^; Slytherin is totally fine for Alexandria, if you feel she should be sorted there and that it'll help her develop as she grow; thus, your answer to the last category should reflect why you think Alex should be in that house rather than why you're in that house and how Alex is relevant to you, if that makes sense?

Just change the title from 'pending' to 'edited' when you've made the adjustments.

Offline Sue

Re: Alexandria Burgess - Edited
« Reply #2 on: 19 Jul 2011, 04:10 am »
:approveds:

all my love for Tany