Topic: Sal Tree - Denied

[Sal Tree]

• • First and last name: Salazar Tree ( Sal Tree for short)
    
    Bloodline: half-blood (mom is the wizard. dad a drunk muggle)
    
    Hair color: lighter black ( its black but looks kinda brown in the light)
    
    Eye color: green
    
    General build: average
    
    Height: tall (like 6'1 tall)
    
    Birthplace: London  
    
    Brief childhood history: when Sal was an infant he got burned by one of his mom’s rouge curses which left a scar running from his left eyebrow to the bottom of his left cheek. At the age of ten Sal ran away with his mom from his drunken father who was a muggle. The two of them ran to the town Bath and from the on lived in a flat there. Sal had a okay child hood but his dad was abusive and usually drunk. Sal was home schooled by his mom because she did not anyone finding out that Sal wasn't normal.
    
    Strengths: defense against the dark arts, history of magic, being a true friend.
    
    Weaknesses: herbology, Divination, keeping a long relationship.
    
    House, why: Slytherin, he likes messing around and, not really paying attention. He is very sneaky, he likes to sneak out of his house and walk long walks in the dark. He also likes to jinks people who gets in hs way. The other reason he wants to be in slytherin is every since he ran away he wanted to get back at his dad so he wants to learn darker spells.
    

[Jayce]

Hi there! Welcome to HPRPG! There are just a few things to attend to before we can get you sorted.

While the form you're using is very similar, it's not the exact Official Character Sheet. So please use the official version instead of shortening some of the section titles. And you'll also need to get rid of the bullet points you've added on as well.

Saying Sal is tall is fine, but there's no way he can be 6'1" at only eleven years old. So please take that part out. There are also some things in Sal's history that are concerning. Why would Sal's mother be throwing around curses so near her son? You will also need to take out any allusions to abuse, since we do like to keep a light and friendly atmosphere here at HPRPG.

Right now your strengths and weaknesses sections are nothing more than lists, and we would like to see you expand them so they're in complete sentence format. In addition, please add at least one more personality strength and weakness for Sal.

Once you've fixed that, just change the title from 'pending' to 'edited'!

[Jayce]

As it's been over two weeks since we've last asked you to make changes, I'm going to deny this character sheet for now. Please feel free to post your sheet again at a later date with the requested changes!