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Offline Darryll Raven

Darryll Raven - Approved [G]
« on: 30 Dec 2011, 04:00 pm »
First and Last Name: Darryll Raven

Bloodline: Half
Hair Color: Black
Eye Color: Grey
General Build: Average
Height: Average

Birthplace: London
Brief Childhood History: Non of his parents are magical, his Grandfather, from his mother's side was a wizard.
He is an only-child, his mother is a housewife and his father is an important muggle business-man. Darryll went to a muggle school before hogwarts and has 2 best friends from school who are muggles as well.

Darryll hates his father and his own name, as his father was the one who chose it. Darryll's father never hit him or used any kind of violence, but he ignored him, and never approved on any of his friendships with his friends from school. Darryll's mother wasn't a lot of help either, Darryll always felt like she is doing the minimum in her job as a mother, and doesn't really care much. His friendships with his friends were always more important to him than his relationship with his parents.

Strengths (Including Personality and Academic):
He is good in classes like Charms and Transfiguration. Learning Languages and history is easy for him as well. He is pretty smart, and acts quickly, but he prefer to keep the knowledge to himself. He is loyal to his closest friends, but doesn't mind using others.

Weaknesses (Including Personality and Academic):
He is bad at Care of Magical Creatures at Potions and at some of the Defence Against the Dark Arts stuff. He is not good with animals, and not likely to get friendly fast. He can get snarky and doesn't forgive people easily.

What House You Feel Your Character Belongs In and Why: I think that he suits the best for Gryffindor, he may won't be the nicest person around and some of his traits suits both Ravenclaw and Slytherin but studying isn't the most important to him and even if he can be a little snarky he feels the most comfortable in Gryffindor. Usually he is calm, but when he gets angry he acts rather recklessly. He is not Prince Charming, but he will protect those he consider his friends. Rules never meant much to him as at home his father was the law and he lost all respect for his father from young age.
« Last Edit: 02 Jan 2012, 06:39 pm by Jayce »

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Offline Jayce

Re: Darryll Raven
« Reply #1 on: 02 Jan 2012, 12:26 pm »
Hi there! Welcome to HPRPG! Before we can get you sorted, there are just a few things to attend to.

We require at least a solid 2-3 paragraphs for the history section. So please expand on what you already have to reach at least the minimum. In addition, there are several grammatical errors in your sheet, most of which are just spelling errors. If you could go ahead and fix those as well, that would be great.

Finally, we leave the decision of choosing a house up to the driver. Even if you don't know him very well yet, out of everyone here, you are the one who knows him best. So please choose either Gryffindor and Slytherin and please tell us why he would belong in the particular house you choose using the house traits.

Once you've done that, just change the title from 'pending' to 'edited'!
« Last Edit: 02 Jan 2012, 01:36 pm by Jayce »

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Offline Darryll Raven

Re: Darryll Raven - Edited
« Reply #2 on: 02 Jan 2012, 01:17 pm »
Done. I'm sorry for the spelling, I forgot to check it. And also, I'm not a native, so I'm pretty sure that I will have some gramatical and spelling errors in the future.

Hope it's okay now.


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Offline Jayce

Re: Darryll Raven - Edited
« Reply #3 on: 02 Jan 2012, 01:40 pm »
That's alright. We have several non-natives on the board and if you ever need help with things like grammar or spelling, you can definitely PM anyone on staff. ^___^

I am going to have to ask you to flesh out the house portion a bit more though. It's great that Darryll feels like he would fit best in Gryffindor, but I'm still not seeing strong enough reasons for him to belong in that house. Remember, the traits that a Gryffindor usually has are things like bravery, chivalry, courage, daring, and recklessness. So how do one or more of these traits coincide with Darryll?

Once you've edited that, just change your title again.

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Offline Darryll Raven

Re: Darryll Raven - Edited
« Reply #4 on: 02 Jan 2012, 02:06 pm »
Thank you =) Though I usually don't notice when I make mistakes, only when I reread what I wrote I may notice some spellings and errors.

BTW, I know that cursing is obviously forbidden on the site, but is it the forbidden in character? Like if one student curse another student in the role play, when both are in characters? Just to make sure.

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Offline Jayce

Re: Darryll Raven - Edited
« Reply #5 on: 02 Jan 2012, 02:19 pm »
So your sheet looks great now, but unfortunately Gryffindor house is now closed. Not to worry though. I'm going to put you on the waiting list and you'll be sorted as soon as a slot opens up. If at any point you would like to pick a different house for Darryll though, just edit the sheet accordingly and reply here.

For your question about cursing though, we allow as much as Rowling did in the books. So pretty much just curses that are around the PG rating. You're free to imply that your character says things worse than that though by detailing it like: "he spoke words that would make his grandparents roll over in their grave". Things like that. :lol:

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Offline Darryll Raven

Re: Darryll Raven - Waiting [G-1]
« Reply #6 on: 02 Jan 2012, 02:27 pm »
Thank you! I'll wait for Gryffindor house to open =)

LOL, understood. Thank you again  :D

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Offline Jayce

Re: Darryll Raven - Waiting [G-1]
« Reply #7 on: 02 Jan 2012, 06:38 pm »
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