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Karlie Smith

Karlie Smith - Denied
« on: 14 Dec 2011, 08:13 am »
First and Last Name: Karlie Smith
Bloodline: Pure.
Hair Color: Jet-black.
Eye Color: Emerald green.
General Build: Average.
Height: Average.
Birthplace: London.
Brief Childhood History: Karlie Smith is a spoiled, rich brat. Her parents are pure-blooded aristocrats who hate half-bloods, Muggleborns, and anyone who disagrees with the opinion of Muggles being inferior. However, while Karlie may be spoiled and rude, she disagrees with this and thinks that Muggles are equal to witches and wizards. For this reason, her parents spoil her in the hopes that she'll give in. Eventually, though, they might end up disowning her if she doesn't change her mind about Muggleborns.
She was bullied by kids in her neighborhood who called her a freak because one of them saw her doing magical things. Because of this, she is a bit depressed and shy. She will stand up for anybody who is bullied. She rarely ever forgives, and she never, ever forgets when someone bullies her or anyone else.
Strengths: Extremely brave when it comes down to it, extremely smart at Potions, good at getting her own way
Weaknesses: Spoiled and therefore not very good when she doesn't get her way, horrible at most subjects besides Potions, and also can't take very much bullying.
What House You Feel Your Character Belongs In and Why: Slytherin, because she is pure-blooded and spoiled. She may not care about blood, but her parents do, both were in Slytherin, so she could just have gotten in because of that.
« Last Edit: 03 Jan 2012, 07:25 pm by Jayce »

Offline Tany

Re: Karlie Smith
« Reply #1 on: 14 Dec 2011, 08:31 pm »
Heya Karlie and welcome to HPRPG~!

However, before we can sort you, I'm going to have to ask that you elaborate in some places. First, could you give us a bit more of Karlie's history? Did Karlie attend a school prior to Hogwarts? Was she homeschooled? Please keep in mind that muggles cannot witness magic without having their memory erased and Ministry intervention; besides, the chances of Karlie doing magic is sort of unlikely prior to Hogwarts unless it was a case of her first magical experience? Also, we don't allow the portrayal of medical conditions here at HPPRG and while I think you used 'depressed' in a sort of passive manner, maybe chose another word to express Karlie's sadness at being bullied? <3

Additionally, could you give us a few more strengths and weaknesses and not forgot the 'why' in there! Adding a 'why' keeps the strengths and weaknesses from being list-like, which we don't want, and gives us a better insight as to why Karlie is the way she is/what kind of character she it. ;3

Lastly, being spoiled and pureblood are actually not reasons she'd be sorted into Slytherin. ^^; House is decided on traits, such as bravery, loyalty, wit, and cunning~ It's up to you which house Karlie goes into, because house is a very key element in character development, but keep in mind that her strengths and weaknesses may give some insight to which house she should be in. ^^

Once you've made the above adjustments just change the title from 'pending' to 'edited'.

Offline Jayce

Re: Karlie Smith - Pending
« Reply #2 on: 03 Jan 2012, 07:25 pm »
As it's been over two weeks since we've last asked you to make changes, I'm going to deny this character sheet for now. Please feel free to post your sheet again at a later date with the requested changes! ;)

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