Topic: Hailey Marrow - Approved [R]

[Hailey Marrow]

First and Last Name: Hailey Marrow

Bloodline: Pureblood

Hair Color: Red

Eye Color: Green

General Build: Average

Height: Tall

Birthplace: London, England

Brief Childhood History: She was born to Warren Marrow and she never really knew her mother, because she took off as soon as Hailey was born. Her dad got married when she was five to a pure blood and she saw her as her mother. She has 2 half siblings and was really close to her younger brother Scott growing up.They used to play chess and paint together. Her dad took her to all the Quidditch games possible and she loved every one of them. She is a strong supporter of Ireland's team and her brother and her would fight about that. She could do magic from a young age so instead of going to a school her father home schooled her. Hailey didn't really have many friends before Hogwarts except her imaginary ones, she was a bit of an outcast but she was fine with that.and was really excited when she got her Hogwarts letter, she would barley sleep the night before it was time to go.

Strengths (Including Personality and Academic): She is really good at Potions and Charms, because her father thought that these are most important for a young witch to learn. She studies a lot so she makes good grades. She is also really good at taking care of animals, because before her father married her step mother he was a dragon trainer and taught her a lot of it.

Weaknesses: She sucks at flying because she's afraid of heights. Very shy because whenever she tries to make friends she feels that she always says the wrong things. Also she is clumsy because she is always spacing out and smacks into walls and people. She is very bad at Herbology, because she doesn't pay attention and messes up all the time.

What House You Feel Your Character Belongs In and Why: Ravenclaw, because she loves to learn and is very creative.

[Tany]

Heya Hailey and welcome to HPRPG~!

However, before we can sort you, there are a few things that need editing. Firstly, we ask that you use one of the three adjectives given on the sheet for the 'height' section, as you did with the 'general build', rather than giving us exact measurements. 5'2" is much too tall for an eleven year old, after all, and it's easier to just state that she's 'tall' to avoid all that.

Secondly, could you give us a bit more about Hailey's childhood? What sort of things did she do for fun, did she attend a school prior to Hogwarts, did she have any friends, why doesn't she know her mom, and so on. ^^ Just so we get a better understanding of how she grew up prior to attending Hogwarts.

Additionally, in her strengths and weaknesses, can you give us some 'why's in there to flesh it out a bit? Why is she good at taking care of animals, why is she good at singing[/i] (please keep in mind that you're playing an original character and not Hayley Williams. ), why is she clumsy and shy? Additionally, we need some academic weaknesses.

And lastly, can you give us a bit more than 'she's smart' as her reason for being in Ravenclaw.

Once you've made the above edits just change the title from 'pending' to 'edited'. (Also, make sure you're not adding titles unnecessarily. Adding 'pending' before you're actually 'pending' could cause you to wait longer than needed in the future.)

[Tany]