Topic: Suzanne Lewis - Approved [G]

[Suzanne Lewis]

First and Last Name:Suzanne Lewis
Bloodline: Half blood
Hair Color: Brown
Eye Color: Blue
General Build:Average
Height: Tall
Birthplace: London, England
Brief Childhood History: Suzanne was born in the Lewis Family to a to a wonderful muggle mom and a wizard dad. She didn't have any other brothers and sisters that she knew of and was very obedient to her parents and grandparents. She was raised like a normal child, was taught to always accept others and always ignore people who dislikes others who always wanted to bully from her parents and went to the local elementary school for the first part of her schooling, and also went to a summer camp as she loved to be outside whenever she could.
Strengths (Including Personality and Academic): Suzanne is very kind, friendly and always mixes well for others as she is always friendly to those around her. Academically, She would excel in Herbology as she loved to garden whenever she possibly could. Suzanne would also excel in Transfiguration as she wanted to be learning the various ways to do stuff and History of Magic as she loved to read about history whenever she possibly could get her hands on the books.
Weaknesses (Including Personality and Academic): Suzanne's weaknesses are when something-or someone tries to get in her way as she didn't trust people who made fun of her as her parents taught her growing up, but didn't know the current way of dealing with things. The classes that would make Suzanne poor at is Potions as she would mix up the potions wrong, Defense against the Dark Arts as she didn't think that the defense skills would be useful in everyday life.
What House You Feel Your Character Belongs In and Why: I personally think that Suzanne should belong in Gryffindor as she's caring and honest person that would care for her classmates, and is yet strong enough to carry on when troubles get to her.

[Tany]

Heya Suzanne and welcome to HPRPG~!

However, before we can sort you, there are a few things that need editing/expanding~ First and foremost, could you bold the respective categories to make it easier to read? (Example| First and Last Name: Suzanne Lewis) Additionally, please remove the exact year that Suzanne was born in- HPRPG doesn't follow a specific timeline and people advance at different paces, so specifying a year is actually more trouble than it's worth.

Onto her history- a bit of what you've shared (such as her love of gardening and that she loved to memorize and read facts) would be better suited for the strengths and weaknesses~ In her history we're looking for a bit more about her childhood: how was she raised, did she attend a school prior to Hogwarts, and that sort of thing. ^^~

And lastly, once you've added the above two notes into her strengths and weaknesses, everything should be good, but maybe add in some 'why's in her strengths and weaknesses respectively? Why is she kind and friendly? Why would she do well in Transfiguration? Why is people getting in her way a weakness, etc?

Once you've made the above edits just change the title from 'pending' to 'edited'. ^^~

[Suzanne Lewis]

I read your comment and I have edited so that you can see the changes that I've made.

[Tany]

Thank you for editing~!

One more small thing-- we actually don't pick your house for you since house choice is a very important key in character development, so I'm going to have to ask which house of the two you chose that you're leaning more to. Make sure to take in consideration which house will be better for Suzanne in the long run and which will give her better character development. ^^~

You know the drill with the title~ <3

[Tany]