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Lulu Pepridge

Lulu Pepridge - Denied
« on: 08 Nov 2011, 08:24 pm »
                                                                                                                           First and Last Name: Lulu Pepridge                                                
Bloodline: half blood                                                                                       Hair color: chesnut-dirty blonde                                                                       Eye color: deep brown                                                                                   General build: petite                                                                                       Height: short-average  

                                                                                                                    
Birth place: Essex, England                                                                             Brief Childhood Story: She was born and raised in Essex, England. She liked it there. it was cozy and quiet, but yet loud and crazy. She liked her school...just not the kids. She was picked on and called names because she was short. some of the names they called her were very harsh. but she had and still has confidence. She did have some true friends. Her family would fight A LOT. but they loved each other. She doesn't like want to brag, but she got great grades. She never let the rude things people said to her let her down. She doesn't think of herself as short, she calls herself funsize.



She liked Essex a lot. She will miss it, but She am SO excited to be in hogwarts! but sometimes she felt she was in a box while living there. She had no real adventures or risks. In hogwarts she will get to have many! She's very excited!



So, she found the imperfections in Essex, but also loved it. She was not rich nor poor. She lived in a wonderfully nice house. She will miss her family and Essex, but she is looking foward to Hogwarts!




                                                                                                                    
Strengths: levitation, transformation, herbology, potions, charms, speaking, reading, writing, acting, dancing, singing, remembering things, bravery, social, debating/negotiating                                                                                   Weaknesses: ancient runes, astronomy, arithmancy, history of magic, divination, listening, falling asleep, focusing, patientence, neatness, quiet, allowing imperfections.
                                                                                                                           What house you think your character belongs in and why: I think i should be placed in Gryffindor because i am as smart as Hermoine, as friendly and fun as Ron, and as brave as Harry. i would love to show my love for Gryffindor  and my Gryffindor pride.


« Last Edit: 13 Dec 2011, 05:27 pm by Jayce »

Offline Tany

Re: Character Sheet
« Reply #1 on: 08 Nov 2011, 09:10 pm »
Heya Lulu and welcome to HPRPG~!

However, before we can sort you, we ask that you use the ~*Official HPRPG Character Sheet*~ without any edits. Additionally, we ask that you title your post with your character's name. ^^

Once you've done both of those just change the title from 'pending' to 'edited' and we'll begin with your sorting.

Offline Tany

Re: Character Sheet
« Reply #2 on: 09 Nov 2011, 01:49 pm »
Thank you for changing you title (please don't edit out the 'pending' next time and just change that to 'edited' or your sheet could be overlooked), but you're still not using the ~*Official HPRPG Character Sheet*~ as is once copied/pasted. ;3 I can't begin sorting you until you do. <3

Offline Tany

Re: Character Sheet
« Reply #3 on: 10 Nov 2011, 02:06 pm »
You're still not using the ~*Official HPRPG Character Sheet*~ as is once copied/pasted. ;3 I can't begin sorting you until you do. <3

Eep, sorry. ^^ You're still doing a bit of it wrong, hun. <3 We need you to directly copy/paste the sheet.

Just change the title once more when you've edited.

Offline Jayce

Re: Lulu Pepridge - Edited
« Reply #4 on: 20 Nov 2011, 09:47 am »
Hey there!

You're using the write form this time, but the layout is kind of odd. Instead of using spaces of tabs, you need to press 'enter/return' after every line to make sure each section starts on a new line.

In the history portion, the last two paragraphs basically say the same exact thing. So please take one out and maybe expand on the remaining paragraph. Maybe give us some specifics about her parents and/or siblings. It's all very vague right now and we'd like to get to know Lulu a little better.

You'll also need to re-write the strengths and weaknesses portion so that they're in sentence form and not a running list. 

And finally, please write the 'what house' portion in third person and not first. And instead of comparing Lulu to past Gryffindors, simply give us reasons why she should be in that particular house in accordance to her characteristics.

Once you've done that, just swap your title again!

Colby Lovell | Madoc Kruszewski

Offline Jayce

Re: Lulu Pepridge - Pending
« Reply #5 on: 13 Dec 2011, 05:27 pm »
As it's been over two weeks since we've last asked you to make changes, I'm going to deny this character sheet for now. Please feel free to post your sheet again at a later date with the requested changes! ;)

Colby Lovell | Madoc Kruszewski