Topic: Willow Whitaker - Denied

[Willow Whitaker]

First and Last Name: Willow Whitaker
Bloodline: Half-blood
Hair Color: Blonde
Eye Color: Brown
General Build: petite
Height: short
Birthplace: Edinburgh, Scotland
Brief Childhood History: Willow is the daughter of Ambrosia and Liam Whitaker. Her mother is a witch who graduated from Hogwarts, who was in Ravenclaw. Her father is a shopkeeper. Her mother is pureblood, though her parents welcome change, and encouraged her when she wanted to try muggle-type living. Her parents met when her mother walked into her father's shop to buy groceries. It was love at first sight.

Her father has always been supportive of their magic, and there were many nights when they would all sit by the fireplace, Willow in her father's lap, her mother telling tales of Hogwarts.

Unlike some children, she didn't learn a whole lot about magic before attending Hogwarts, because her mother wanted it to be as magical as possible for her. Their way of life as also rather mundane. Her mother rarely used magic to complete household chores, opting instead to do things the muggle way.
Strengths (Including Personality and Academic): Potions, Charms, very intellectual, clever
Weaknesses (Including Personality and Academic): Care of Magical Creatures, has many phobias, very socially awkward
What House You Feel Your Character Belongs In and Why: Slytherin, because she's very blunt and rude (even when not meaning to be). She's intelligent, but not enough to be in Ravenclaw. She's sly and prefers seclusion.

[Tany]

Heya Willow and welcome to HPRPG~!

However, before we can sort you, there are a few things that need editing. ^^~ First, in her history, we're looking for Willow's childhood history and we don't get much information about her at all. Could you give us a better glimpse into her childhood? Did she attend school prior to Hogwarts, what sort of things did she do for fun, did she have any friends, what was it like growing up in a magical environment... That sort of thing.

Second, we ask that you give us paragraph strengths and weaknesses, rather than listing them. Add in some 'why's to give us a better understanding of the reasons those are her strengths and weaknesses. Why are Potions and Charms her best subjects, why is she very intellectual and clever? Why are her phobias her weaknesses and maybe even give us what phobias she has, why is her social awkwardness a weakness?

It sort of confuses me, because her strengths point out that she's very intellectual, but you state she isn't smart enough for Ravenclaw, but she's rude and blunt enough for Slytherin (those could go into her weaknesses :3) but those actually aren't traits that sort you into Slytherin. ^^ Slytherin traits are: cunning, ambitious, a love of power, and Ravenclaw traits are: wit, cleverness, wisdom, creativity-- if that helps.

Once you've made the above edits just change the title from 'pending' to 'edited'.

[Jayce]

As it's been over two weeks since we've last asked you to make changes, I'm going to deny this character sheet for now. Please feel free to post your sheet again at a later date with the requested changes!