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Juliet Rose White

Juliet Rose White - Denied
« on: 02 Nov 2011, 11:44 am »
First and Last Name: Juliet Rose White

Bloodline: Pureblood
Hair Color: Blonde
Eye Color: Blue
General Build: Petite
Height: Average

Birthplace: London
Brief Childhood History: Juliet is the eldest daughter of Daniel and Harriet White, both of whom work in the Ministry of Magic as Unspeakbles. They met at work and then were married, producing Juliet a year later. She has been raised to realise her full potential and to also accept everyone, no matter who they are.

Strengths (Including Personality and Academic): Charms, Quidditch, Very loyal, caring, dance and singing
Weaknesses (Including Personality and Academic): Can be quiet, is used to having lots of money and Transfiguration.
What House You Feel Your Character Belongs In and Why: I think Gryffindor would be the best house for Juliet as she is loyal and caring and has had family members in the house before her.
« Last Edit: 21 Nov 2011, 07:14 pm by Jayce »

Offline Jayce

Re: Juliet Rose White
« Reply #1 on: 02 Nov 2011, 01:08 pm »
Hi there! Welcome to HPRPG!

Before we can get you sorted, there are a few things to attend to.

We require at least a good 2-3 solid paragraphs in the history section, as stated on the official sheet. So please expand that section and tell us more about Juliet. What was her childhood like? What did she do growing up? Did she have any friends? What was her prior schooling? These are just a few things you can talk about. ^____^

For the strengths and weaknesses sections, please write everything in a proper sentence format. Right now it's just a list and while it's a very nice list, we'd just like to know why those particular things are what they are to Juliet.

Finally, while it's great that you wand Juliet to be in Gryffindor, the traits 'loyal and caring' aren't really Gryffindor-related. In fact, they fall more in line with Hufflpuff, which is also a fantastic house! So please edit this portion to reflect the proper house you'd like Juliet to be sorted into.

Once you've done that, just change the title from 'pending' to 'edited'! :biglove:

Colby Lovell | Madoc Kruszewski

Offline Jayce

Re: Juliet Rose White - Pending
« Reply #2 on: 21 Nov 2011, 07:14 pm »
As it's been over two weeks since we've last asked you to make changes, I'm going to deny this character sheet for now. Please feel free to post your sheet again at a later date with the requested changes! ;)

Colby Lovell | Madoc Kruszewski