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Dean Yillington

Dean Yillington - Denied
« on: 25 Oct 2011, 04:25 am »
Bloodline: Pure-blood
Hair colour: Dirty blond hair.
Eye colour: Aqua
General build: Average
Height: Tall

Birthplace: Edinburgh, Ireland

Brief Childhood Story: Dean Yillington grew up in a family of four in Edinburgh, Ireland. His brother, Terry, is a second-year student at Hogwarts. Dean grew up in a very small and quiet area with not many people living there. Dean loves to play Quidditch with his father on his Cleansweep 5. He's very good at playing Chaser.
                              As a little boy Dean was very shy and quiet. He never liked to talk to adults, mainly because he was afraid that they were going to attack him with magic. Dean liked to play games of cards with his brother and dad. Dean's parents also owned a house-elf named Willy. Dean felt really bad for Willy but wasn't aloud to free him. Dean was smart but not intelligent, knowing quite a few things about magic. When Dean was accepted into Hogwarts his father said that he was so proud of Dean that he would buy him a better broom in his second-year at Hogwarts.

Strengths: Funny, Smart, Sporty. DADA, Transfiguration
Weaknesses: Faith, honesty, greedyness. Divination, Astronomy.
What House You Feel Your Character Belongs In and Why: Ravenclaw because he's smart and kind.
« Last Edit: 21 Nov 2011, 07:14 pm by Jayce »

Offline Ninjela

Re: Dean Yillington
« Reply #1 on: 25 Oct 2011, 11:20 am »
Hey there! Welcome to HPRPG!

Before we can sort you, there are a few things in your character sheet I'd like to ask you to change.

First, just to make it easier to read, could you please bold the titles for each section of the character sheet?

Then, could you re-write the Strengths and Weaknesses sections so that they appear more as paragraphs than as lists? Perhaps give us some reasons for why he is those things.

Once you've made these changes, change the title of this thread from 'pending' to 'edited' and we can move on!

Nikki made the pretty!

Dean Yillington

Re: Dean Yillington - Edited
« Reply #2 on: 25 Oct 2011, 12:43 pm »
Bloodline: Pure-blood
Hair colour: Dirty blond hair.
Eye colour: Aqua
General build: Average
Height: Tall

Birthplace: Edinburgh, Ireland

Brief Childhood Story: Dean Yillington grew up in a family of four in Edinburgh, Ireland. His brother, Terry, is a second-year student at Hogwarts. Dean grew up in a very small and quiet area with not many people living there. Dean loves to play Quidditch with his father on his Cleansweep 5. He's very good at playing Chaser.
                              As a little boy Dean was very shy and quiet. He never liked to talk to adults, mainly because he was afraid that they were going to attack him with magic. Dean liked to play games of cards with his brother and dad. Dean's parents also owned a house-elf named Willy. Dean felt really bad for Willy but wasn't aloud to free him. Dean was smart but not intelligent, knowing quite a few things about magic. When Dean was accepted into Hogwarts his father said that he was so proud of Dean that he would buy him a better broom in his second-year at Hogwarts.

Strengths: Dean is a smart and funny boy. Back at his home he usually would make his brother laugh all of the time. Dean was also very sporty and athletic. He loved to play Quidditch with his brother and father and he was always determined to win. Dean would be rather gifted with Defence Against the Dark Arts and Transfiguration.
Weaknesses: Dean was determined to win and achieve his goals but when he wasn't, he didn't have much faith and confidence in himself. Dean also lied a lot to his brother, and a few times to his parents, he was very dishonest. Dean also was a little greedy. He never liked to share treats with his brother. Dean would have a difficulty with understanding Divination and Astronomy.
What House You Feel Your Character Belongs In and Why: Ravenclaw because he's smart and kind. Also, possibly Slytherin because he is always determined to achieve his goals.

Dean Yillington

Re: Dean Yillington - Edited
« Reply #3 on: 01 Nov 2011, 12:56 pm »
Have you guys seen this yet because I have been waiting for a while.

Offline Tany

Re: Dean Yillington - Edited
« Reply #4 on: 01 Nov 2011, 03:21 pm »
It seems we missed it. ^^; Did you have your title as 'edited' this whole time? If so, I apologize. <3

However, can you copy/paste your application into the first post by hitting 'modify' in the top right corner instead of posting it again? Also, we can't begin sorting or asking you to edit your sheet further until you're using the ~*Official HPRPG Character Sheet*~ with no edits.


Offline Jayce

Re: Dean Yillington - Pending
« Reply #5 on: 21 Nov 2011, 07:13 pm »
As it's been over two weeks since we've last asked you to make changes, I'm going to deny this character sheet for now. Please feel free to post your sheet again at a later date with the requested changes! ;)

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