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Liberty Ravendale

Liberty Ravendale - Approved [R]
« on: 20 Sep 2011, 12:59 pm »
First and Last Name: Liberty Ravendale.

Bloodline: Pure.
Hair Color: Light Blond.
Eye Color: Green.
General Build: Petite.
Height: Average.

Birthplace: Yorkshire, England.

Brief Childhood History: Liberty was born in Yorkshire, England to her Mother, Anna and Hugh, into a small house, in a small town in Yorkshire. Liberty's parents were both Hogwarts students, but after they left Hogwarts, they both began to tutor other younger students, Liberty was left out for her first few years, but she understood her what her parents were doing, getting a bit more money to buy a bigger house, as Liberty's Grandmother was staying over at weekends.

They were living in a very small flat with only two bedrooms and a very small kitchen/lounge area, but when Liberty's parents started to earn more money, they were able to move to the city of Yorkshire and were able to let Liberty go to Muggle School, were her confidence started to grow and grow, she also began to make new friends and enjoyed her time at Primary school. She had a few friends at Primary School, But only two were boys, the rest were girls, she finds it comfortable to be around girls rather than boys Chris and James and her girl pals are called Tiffany, Ebony and Emma, there was more to talk about and secrets to share with her girly friends and more to debate about. None of them were rich or talented, but they just loved being themselves and so did Liberty.

Liberty turned 11 years old a few years later, and was minding her own business in the living room, when her Parents and Grandmother walked into the room, Liberty saw her Mother clutching a small envelope with a red sealing. She knew it was something good, because her Parents and Grandmother did not stop smiling at Liberty and she knew what was coming next.
Her parents sat her down, her Grandmother sitting on the sofa next to her Son in Law, and asked Liberty to open the envelope. Liberty began to read the letter out loud, and just couldn't hold her tears, her parents just carried on smiling too her with their proud, happy smiles.


Strengths (Including Personality and Academic): Liberty is somewhat childish sometimes, but behaves herself and acts mature. Liberty is content, but a little shy. She is very confident about making new friends, loves meeting new people also. Liberty loves Charms and Potions but also Divination is her best subject. Liberty took part in many sports days at her school, and just loved to go on walks with her Grandmother. So she likes the sound of Quidditch and seems interested to become part of a quidditch team.

Weaknesses (Including Personality and Academic): Her weaknesses are, speaking out to people, Liberty has some attitude problems, she can also get a bit dramatic sometimes, but not often. She is scared of spiders and other insects. Liberty isn't very good at Defense Against the Dark Arts and isn't good at learning Herbology or Artihmancy, even though she likes Maths and studied Maths in Muggle School, she also loves flowers.

What House You Feel Your Character Belongs In and Why: Ravenclaw. Liberty is very creative, she is witty and clever at most things, she is a goodhearted girl and will do anything to make friends. Liberty also is very wise and will take time into thinking things.
« Last Edit: 21 Sep 2011, 01:01 pm by Tany »

Offline Tany

Re: Liberty Ravendale
« Reply #1 on: 20 Sep 2011, 03:56 pm »
Heya Liberty and welcome to HPRPG~!

However, before we can sort you, there's just one small thing that I need you to edit-- I'm not sure why, but after nearly every comma you capitalize the next word as if there were a period separating it. For example:

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Liberty was left out for her first few years, But she understood her what her parents were doing, Getting a bit more money to buy a bigger house, as Liberty's Grandmother was staying over at weekends.

So if you could go back through and fix those few grammar mistakes, that'd be great! Just change the title from 'pending' to 'edited' once you've done so. <3

Liberty Ravendale

Re: Liberty Ravendale - Edited
« Reply #2 on: 21 Sep 2011, 02:27 am »
Heya :)
Sorry he he, it's a habit of mine. :cry:
But thanks for spoting it ha ha!
x

Offline Tany

Re: Liberty Ravendale - Edited
« Reply #3 on: 21 Sep 2011, 01:01 pm »
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