Topic: Piper Brown - Approved [G]

[Piper Brown]

First and Last Name: Piper Brown
Bloodline: Pure

Hair Color: Brown
Eye Color: Blue

General Build: average
Height: average

Birthplace: Caerphilly, Wales

Brief Childhood History: Piper's Mother Victoria is a Pureblood but turned out to be very bright and she ended up in Gryffindor unlike the rest of her family which were in Ravenclaw. Her father Marcus is a pureblood and made his whole family happy when he married another pureblood. When Marcus was at school he was in Gryffindor where the rest off his family had been when they were at school. Piper Brothers Joesph who is 20 and Jacob who is 19 were both in Gryffindor.

When Piper was born she was the first to be born into her paternal family for 5 generations. so there was a huge celebration when she was finally born. Her brother are very protective over her as well as her Father but her mother just spoils her because she is the only girl. They all live and grew up in Wales. the house they live in is detached and big. Piper also went to a normal muggle school for 2 years when she was 5 but she kept using magic and had to leave. She then meet most of her close friends through her parents friends.

Strengths : Piper is very caring and kind even to animals, creatures and people who are evil. She knows how to make people laugh which also her two older bothers are good at as well but knows when things have gone to far and need to stop. she can take most things light heartily but if someone disrespects her family she will then defend herself and family.Piper is very friendly and approachable which helps her to make friends. Piper would be could at Care of Magical Creatures and Transfiguration

Weaknesses:
 Sometimes can have a really bad temper which can get her into trouble if she is not careful. Gets distracted quite easily. Another weakness would be the fear of losing everyone close to her. I don't think Piper would be good at potions or Divination

What House You Feel Your Character Belongs In and Why: i think she belongs in Gryffindor because:
1) that is were her family were and if she wasn't she would think she disappointed them.
2) i think she has the kindness and the bravery to be there and she also gets along with most people.

[Sue]

Hi and welcome to HPRPG

Before we get too far into your sheet, could you please go back and bold the headings as follows:

Code: [Select]

[b]First and Last Name:[/b] Piper Brown
And so on, so it reads like:

First and Last Name: Piper Brown

It just makes the sheet easier to read. 


Also, if you could please go back and make sure you are using proper grammar, spelling, punctuation, and capitalization, it would be appreciated. You will be required to do so in the RP areas, so it's best to get off to a good start. 

Once you've done that, we'll  get into the actual body of your sheet, and go from there! When you've made your changes, switch your subject line from 'pending' to 'edited.'

[Jayce]

Hi there!

So there are just a few things that need clearing up.

I'm confused as to why it was shocking for Marcus's family that he married another pureblood? Usually, that's a pretty accepted occurrence, unless they were really hoping he would marry a Muggleborn?

We'd also like to know a bit more about Piper and her childhood. Did she attend school? Did she have friends? What sort of activities did she do while growing up? These are just some of the few questions you can answer to help expand this section.

There are also still several grammatical mistakes in the sheet, especially in the Weaknesses section. Remember to capitalize the words at the beginning of the sentence and to use correct punctuation.

Once you've done that, just swap the title again!

[Tany]