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Keagan Jefferey

Keagan Jefferey - Approved [H]
« on: 24 Jul 2011, 08:26 pm »
First and Last Name: Keagan Jefferey

Bloodline: Muggleborn
Hair Color: Strawberry Blond
Eye Color: Blue
General Build: Average
Height: Tall

Birthplace: Ballyvaughan, Ireland
Brief Childhood History:  Keagan lived in Ballyvaughan Ireland her whole life. She has a little sister 1 1/2 years younger named Bethany and another sister who is 9 years older named Lianna. When she was 5 years old her two muggle parents died in a car accident. When she was 7 years old she and her two sisters were adopted by two muggles. Her adopted mother encouraged her to try dancing lessons and she did. She took 3 dance classes and way a very excellent dancer. She made lots of friends in dancing classes. Lianna was approaching her 7th year at hogwarts and it was necessary for them to know about magic and Hogwarts but Liana didn't want to tell them.
            Keagan ended up telling them one night. They did not believe her for a long time until Lianna showed her parents. Ever since Lianna's 17th birthday in July Lianna did a lot of magic. Keagan really loved all the magic her sister did. It was very interesting to her. Bethany was actually kind of frightened her whole life from it which worked out good since she isn't a witch. Keagan was extremely excited when she got her Hogwarts letter. It was hard keeping it from her muggle friends that she tells everything, but she managed it.
          
Strengths (Including Personality and Academic):  Because of Keagan's experiences you would think she would be shy. But Keagan is very friendly, is fun to be with, and can be weird sometimes - in the good way. Also she is very loyal to her friends. She will never talk about someone behind their back. Academically she is very good at potions, and is very enthusiastic about it. She also is very determined and hard working in all subjects.
Weaknesses (Including Personality and Academic): If Keagan's not comfortable with someone, she can act overly nice, and can be kind of hard to talk to. Also, she is really indecisive. It is sometimes annoying when you hang out with her. Academically her weakness is DADA. She can sometimes get scared about the Dark Arts and get sidetracked so she cannot perform the spell correctly, even when she tries her hardest.
What House You Feel Your Character Belongs In and Why: I feel like Keagan should be in Hufflepuff. I feel this because Keagan is very loyal to her friends. She will never talk bad and will always be honest. She is also very hard working and determined in her academics and sports. She will never give up.  
« Last Edit: 26 Jul 2011, 12:17 pm by Jayce »

Offline Tany

Re: Keagan Jefferey
« Reply #1 on: 25 Jul 2011, 01:52 pm »
Heya Keagan and welcome to HPRPG~!

However, before we can sort you, there are a few edits we need. First, her 'height' should be one of the three adjectives given on the sheet, so if you could pick from that rather than give us the specifics, that'd be great.

As for her brief childhood history, I'm a bit confused. ^^; Her parents know about magic, but still felt the need to give Keagan up for adoption because their neighbor told them she was? And then they gave her away to a witch? I guess I'm just lost to how they knew the woman was a witch and why their squib neighbor came out so honestly to them about Keagan being a witch and them not freaking out or anything. -confused-

Otherwise, your sheet looks good- just change the title from 'pending' to 'edited' and we'll go from there. <3

Keagan Jefferey

Re: Keagan Jefferey - Pending
« Reply #2 on: 25 Jul 2011, 02:00 pm »
Ok, Thank you Ill edit it now. And your right.. to think about it i am kinda confused too, lol.

Offline Sue

Re: Keagan Jefferey - Edited
« Reply #3 on: 26 Jul 2011, 08:11 am »
A few more things and you should be all set. :D

First of all, I'd like for you to go through and proofread, because you've made a few spelling/grammatical errors that are making things somewhat hard to follow.  :sweatdrop: Take your time; you don't need to rush through your sheet.  :lol:

And just a clarification: Keagan's adoptive parents also adopted her sisters? Just checking because it wasn't clear.

switch your titles again when you're done~

all my love for Tany

Keagan Jefferey

Re: Keagan Jefferey - Edited
« Reply #4 on: 26 Jul 2011, 08:37 am »
Ok thank you. And yes they did adopt her sisters too. I spell check and fixed everything that i noticed was wrong.  :D

Offline Jayce

Re: Keagan Jefferey - Edited
« Reply #5 on: 26 Jul 2011, 12:17 pm »
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