Topic: Juliet Nymphington - Approved [H]

[Juliet Nymphington]

First And Last Name: Juliet Nymphington
Bloodline: Half-blood
Hair Color: dark brown
Eye Color: dark brown
General Build: Average
Height: tall
Birthplace: Dorset,England.
Brief Childhood History: Juliet's mother, Ellie was an outstanding witch, and was one with the men too. She was unemployed,but she had lots in the bank. One day,she went into London on a visit, and she met a young man at the train station. It was love at first sight and they soon got married. When she told him she was a witch, Harry(the man)moved into Ellie's house. Soon after, Ellie got pregnant with Juliet. Thing is, Ellie hadn't told Harry she was an animagus. After Juliet was born, Ellie told Harry.Before he said anything, a death eater came through the window and killed Ellie.It tried to kill Juliet, but Harry protected her. Luckily it didn't kill Harry, but it made him very angry about everything. When Juliet got the the hogwarts letter he calmed down and let her go.
Strengths:Juliet is good at care of magical creatures because she is so quiet. Juliet is determined at whatever she does, which helps her a lot! And lastly,she is a good friend...
Weaknesses:Juliet hates divination, she doesn't see the point because you will never use it in life. Juliet always lets other people decide, meaning she never gets a say in life. And Juliet is always tense around people she isn't friends with, making it hard to make friends at all.
What House You Feel Your Character Belongs In and Why:Hufflepuff.
I think Hufflepuff is the best choice because she is sweet and shy when she wants to be.

[Tany]

Heya Juliet and welcome to HPRPG~!

However, before we can sort you, there are a few things that need editing. First, can you bold the beginning of every question? (Example| First and Last Name: Juliet Nymphington). It makes it much easier to read.

Secondly, by ~birthplace, we actually mean the town/city/village and whatnot rather than just the vagueness of a hospital. Remember, it has to be somewhere in the UK! <3 Additionally, please make sure you space after periods and commas. I'm having some trouble reading it all smashed up like that. ^^; Once you've done that just change the title from 'pending' to 'edited' and we'll continue your sorting from there.

[Tany]

Thank you for editing!

Still not quite understanding the birthplace bit. ^^; We just need the city, town, what have you. So Richmond is good, but is that in... England or...? We just need the location she was born and raised in. (Example| London, England). Additionally, there are a handful of areas where you still haven't spaced between periods and the beginning of the next sentence or you haven't spaced between parenthesis and such. Please make sure you catch all of those and maybe run the entire thing through spell-check, as it should help. <3

Onto the history~ Being an animagus isn't something you can pass onto your child through birth, so that's not anything to worry about. ^^ Also, Dementors cannot kill you- they simply suck your soul out and leave you a hollow shell... not to mention it's extremely unlikely that one would randomly fly into someone's house, let alone kill them, or even leave physical scars. ^^; Him going onto make Juliet his slave is also not allowed, as it implies abuse and, as HPRPG is family friendly, touchy subjects like that are not welcome. It's probably best that you go back through Juliet's history and make it a bit more realistic. ;3

For her strengths and weaknesses you need at least three academic and personality for each, so make sure you've the correct amount there.

You know the drill with the title. ^^

[Juliet Nymphington]

First And Last Name: Juliet Nymphington
Bloodline: Half-blood
Hair Color: dark brown
Eye Color: dark brown
General Build: Average
Height: tall
Birthplace: Dorset,England.
Brief Childhood History: Juliet's mother, Ellie was an outstanding witch, and was one with the men too. She was unemployed,but she had lots in the bank. One day,she went into London on a visit, and she met a young man at the train station. It was love at first sight and they soon got married. When she told him she was a witch, Harry(the man)moved into Ellie's house. Soon after, Ellie got pregnant with Juliet. Thing is, Ellie hadn't told Harry she was an animagus. After Juliet was born, Ellie told Harry.Before he said anything, a death eater came through the window and killed Ellie.It tried to kill Juliet, but Harry protected her. Luckily it didn't kill Harry, but it made him very angry about everything. When Juliet got the the hogwarts letter he calmed down and let her go.
Strengths:Juliet is good at care of magical creatures, probably because she came from one! Juliet is determined at whatever she does, which helps her a lot! And lastly,she is a good friend...
Weaknesses:Juliet hates divination, she doesn't see the point because you will never use it in life. Juliet always lets other people decide, meaning she never gets a say in life. And Juliet is always tense around people she isn't friends with, making it hard to make friends at all.
What House You Feel Your Character Belongs In and Why:Either Slytherin or Hufflepuff.
I say Slytherin because she can be very sly and cunning when she wants to. I say Hufflepuff because she is sweet and shy sometimes.

[Tany]

Can you modify your original post with your application like you did the first time, love? ^^;

[Jayce]

Hi there! Thank you for making the edits!

There are just two things left to attend to.

First, people who are animagi are not considered magical creatures. It's not something they're born with and it doesn't make them any less human. So if you could reword that section of Juliet's strengths, that would be great.

Second, while Hufflepuff and Slytherin are both great choices for houses, we'll need you to narrow it down to one, since we can't choose a house for you.

Once you've done that, just swap the title again!

[Ninjela]