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Autumn Shelsher

Autumn Shelsher - Approved [S]
« on: 26 Sep 2011, 04:39 am »
First and Last Name: Autumn Shelsher


Bloodline: Pureblood

Hair Color: Dark Brown

Eye Color: Emerald

General Build: Average

Height: Average


Birthplace: London, England

Brief Childhood History:
Her parents are both pure bloods Slytherin and knew each other from school days. Even though, that time her mum used to have a huge crush on her dad's bestfriend and her father used to not notice her mother, since he had a wandering eyes on his school days. While at the war, her dad got mixed up in the dark side because he was trying to get his bestfriend out of the dark circle he was forced into. Those attempts failed and in the end of the war they both were forgiven because of their condition. After graduation her parents never met each other until 5 years later. They met at the reunion and started as bestfriend along with her dad's bestfriend. A year later they got married because they found love with each other.

3 years later, when her dad's godson(from the previous marriage of his bestfriend with a pureblood) was 3 half years old, she was born. 6 months after hers, Carmel Dean-her dad's bestfriend half-blood daughter- also was born. They had been bestfriend since they were infant and inseparable. Her dad said that she used to spend an hour crying when Carmel had to go home. And the same with Carmel. They got each other back ever since, almost like sisters.

Her relationship with her parents are close. She is always amused when she watched her parents idiotic fight over stupid things. She is the only child and her parents seem to be enough with that. She went to the same muggle school as Carmel since her family also moved to Oxford. Her dad and his bestfriend is that close, even though none of them would admit it. As a child, she liked talking, pranking, sweets, and flying. She got a frog pet named Candace and liked to scare her muggle friends with it.


Strengths (Including Personality and Academic):
Autumn is good with words(persuasion) and acting. She adapted well with new people and environment. She is an easy-going girl. She socialize with people well. And she is extremely loyal to her closest friend especially Carmel. She loves history, like her mother. She excels History of Magic and have big interest with Defence of Dark Arts. She is confident and sassy.

Weaknesses (Including Personality and Academic):
She is annoying when she wants to be. She tends to be immature and difficult when other people opinion opposed hers. She isn't so forgiving, she will get a revenge on you at least once until she even considered to forgive you. She is like the devil herself when mad. She is not the one anyone want to mess with. She has difficulties with arithmacy.

What House You Feel Your Character Belongs In and Why:
She fits in Slytherin. Other than the fact that she was born from a pureblood Slytherin couple, she is cunning. Even though she is not ambitious much, she won't let anything to get in the way of her goal. She is a natural born leader when needed to be. She is cocky and arrogant, also daring. She is manipulative and likes to try out harmless jinx and prank on people.

P.S. Yes, that Carmel. Me and my sis decided to relate our character somehow. And sorry for the swear word, it just come out because I thought if anything could describe her one word, it is the word fits her the best-_-
« Last Edit: 28 Sep 2011, 09:33 am by Jayce »

Offline Tany

Re: Autumn Shelsher
« Reply #1 on: 26 Sep 2011, 01:11 pm »
Heya Autumn and welcome to HPRPG~!

However, before we can sort you, there are a few things that need editing. First and foremost, I feel a lot of your sheet is comparing Autumn to Carmel (assuming you mean this Carmel?) and we'd much rather you just explain how Autumn is, rather than spending the whole time comparing. <3

Additionally, HPRPG is family friendly, so please remove the swear word you've chosen to describe Autumn in her weaknesses. ;)

Once you've made the above changes just swap the title from 'pending' to 'edited' and we'll continue with your sorting from there.

Offline Jayce

Re: Autumn Shelsher - Edited
« Reply #2 on: 26 Sep 2011, 05:13 pm »
Hi there! Thank you for making the edits!

There is just one more thing to address. In the strengths, you say that Autumn "can make people do what she wants". Unfortunately, the way you've worded it, it comes across as god-modding, which is not allowed here. Autumn can try to make people do what she wants and she can be considered very persuasive, but in the end, it is up to the drivers of other characters to decide whether or not they do what Autumn demands of them. So if you could reword that, it would be fantastic!

Once again, just swap the title when you're done. :)

Colby Lovell | Madoc Kruszewski

Offline Jayce

Re: Autumn Shelsher - Edited
« Reply #3 on: 28 Sep 2011, 09:33 am »
:approveds:

Colby Lovell | Madoc Kruszewski