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The Daily Prophet => The Sorting Hat (aka Character Sheets) => : Arista Brandon 01 Nov 2011, 02:56 PM
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First and Last Name: Arista Brandon
Bloodline: Pure
Hair Color: Dark Brown with Red Lowlights (Natural)
Eye Color: Grey
General Build: Petite
Height: Short
Birthplace: Aberdeen, Scotland
Brief Childhood History: Arista was born Aristana Lisette Brandon to Maddison and Liam Brandon. She has two younger brothers, Aidan and Micah, who are three years younger than she.
Arista, as her name suggests, is seen as the best in her family. She has never heard the word 'no' in her life. She feels entitled, and her parents do not discourage this attitude and behavior.
When she was six years old, she moved to Edinburgh, Scotland. This was a terribly traumatic move for her, since she entered Muggle School early, she had many friends that she was quite close to in Aberdeen. When she moved to Edinburgh, she had quite a hard time making new friends, but she excelled in school. She became withdrawn, and she felt that she was better than everyone else because of her bloodline, as well as her talents in school.
She soon found solace in her youngest brother, Micah. He was only three at the time, but he became her best friend. Even though she is traveling to Hogwarts this year, he promises to write to her at least once or twice a week. He is one of the only people she has ever truly cared about in her entire life.
Strengths (Including Personality and Academic): Academically, Arista has taken a liking to potions and charms her mother was especially gifted in the former when she was in school, and she has been teaching Arista and her brothers the basics before they entered school. When she enters Hogwarts, she naturally picks up on Charms, and she finds the spell intonation, as well as the wand patterns, quite simple. Personality wise, she is quick witted, intelligent, and can seem spoiled and arrogant. Aidan has always challenged his sister in battles of the mind, often instigating impromptu spelling bees and games of wizard chess.
Weaknesses (Including Personality and Academic): Arista is not very gifted in Herbology and Divination. She seems to get easily frustrated, and is often close-minded about the world around her, which makes her a terrible Divinator, and an even worse Herbologist. Her parents had never really pushed her into situations where she had to be open minded. The only real social gatherings the Brandon family had attended were elite groups of other Pureblood families, often with children already enrolled in Hogwarts or another Academy of Magic. Socially, Arista is apathetic, and often cannot understand the emotions of others around her. Her brothers, as well as her parents, are very quiet, and do not show intense emotion during social interaction, so she has no real example of an emotional, passionate socialite.
What House You Feel Your Character Belongs In and Why: Slytherin, because she is cunning, can be arrogant, and enjoys power.
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Heya Arista and welcome to HPRPG~!
However, before we can sort you, there are a few things that need editing. First, mostly a question: are the red lowlights natural or dyed? Second, could you remove the specific height from the 'height' part? 'Short' is enough and technically, at eleven, 5'2 would be considered tall. ;3
As for her childhood history we really don't get much of anything concerning her childhood other than the notion that she moved. Could you expand there? Give us a bigger look into her history-- did she attend a school prior to Hogwarts, did she have any friends, what did she do for fun, how was she raised? Feel free to look at some other sheets for a better idea of what we're looking for here. ^^~
Her strengths and weaknesses are good, but they're sort of list-like, and we're looking for a bit more 'meat' one those 'bones'. Could you add in some 'why's there? For example, why she's arrogant and spoiled (you could also further explain this in her upbringing in her history) and that sort of thing.
And lastly, just a note- being a pureblood doesn't necessarily count as a ~trait for Slytherin. ;3
Once you've made the above edited just change the title from 'pending' to 'edited' and we'll continue with your sorting from there. <3
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Finished! Thanks for the critique! I realized, looking over it, that it wasn't my best work in general, so I fixed it as you asked.
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